No Good Deed - Chapter 2

There's finally a new chapter up at No Good Deed.
'3 and 1/2 Years to Kyuubi's Sealing'
Here's the notes:
If you don't remember Kachuu from the first chapter of it, he's meant to be Minato's teammate from when they trained under Jiraiya. In this fic, I decided that he was also Kuchina's older brother. People seemed to really like her from the manga, so I decided to give her a cameo in this chapter. Uchiha Eriko is made up, she's Kuchina's former teammate.
We've also met Taji, briefly, in Chapter 1 & 2 of Ro7.
Ibara is not technically original. She's one of the b****es who makes fun of Naruto after he fails the genin exam - I don't remember which off the top of my head but this was the name one of the fan sites gave her.
Suzu has been mentioned within Ro7 as well.
There is a second part to this chapter but I don't think I'm going to put it up until after Chapter like 12 of Ro7 (by my numbering not fanfiction's).

Because it's been so long since the last update and the first since I started this blog I figured I'd explain it a bit. Basically No Good Deed is meant to house the back story of Role of Seven.
My plan is to update it as needed so that you don't get too many spoilers and instead NGD complements Ro7 in its 'revelations'. This means that NGD won't always be updated chronologically (although the first two chapters have been). To help you with this, the chapters are nicely titled with their time line.
If you have any questions, just let me know.

Role of Seven - When You're Sleeping Pt 2

New update for this week. Chapter 5, "When You're Sleeping Pt. 2", for your reading pleasure. Sorry for the slight delay, I decided to add the funeral scene kinda last minute and then I decided ,to take it out again. So it's still kind of short but the next part should be longer.

Okay, here's the end notes:
I'm gonna be kind of honest and admit that both of these scenes got away from me. I had three scenes that I had planned on writing for this part of the chapter and I ended up cutting one of them because it sucked (it was the dinner with the Daimyo if you were wondering. That meant I couldn't really cut either of these scenes without losing the information in them, which would make part 3 of this chapter really confusing.
I mean, I know what I'm trying to say in them, but reading them back I just don't like them and I don't know if they're actually conveying what they're supposed to but I re-reading them multiple times hasn't really given me any ideas on how to fix them so you get the update instead.

Also, you might have noticed above but I'm changing the 'translation' of shunshin to body flicker within the story because of something I read on the tv tropes wiki. I don't know if the explanation they gave for 'flash step' was accurate, but I can't get it out of my head so I'll stick with body flicker so that I can type it without giggling - I would use shunshin more frequently, but I always spell it wrong.

Lastly a question: Do I avoid using 'said' too frequently?
I was reading this blog about writing a few weeks ago and the guy/gal writing it suggested that all the replacements are actually more distracting. I try to use them to convey more about how something is being said, but is it ineffecitve?

Update? What Update?

Yeah, I changed my mind; though, I might still manage some time tonight. I want the next post to be a bit longer so I'm adding another scene to it. It's almost done already, which is why I might still manage tonight, but if I don't finish it early, it'll go up tomorrow instead.

Hmmm

Next update might be tomorrow if I take time to edit it soon. Otherwise, later this week.
We'll see.

Role of Seven - When You're Sleeping Pt 1

Yeah, I made up my mind. Mainly because I found an okay stopping point. So this chapter will come in pieces as well. Probably 3, maybe 4, not sure just yet. I was gonna wait until like Wednesday anyways, but I don't actually like sitting on chapters for so long.
Anyways, we are now officially on Chapter 5, 'When You're Sleeping'.

And here are the notes:
My spell checker totally hates me because I always end sentences with prepositions. I know it's technically bad grammar, but it's the way I talk and I can't really break the habit in writing without things seeming awkward. Also according to spell checker, you can't be angry 'at' someone just 'with', screw that.

Is it silly to have all the guest quarters in the administration building?
Probably.
Did it make it a lot easier since they were all in one building?
Yes.

Also, I don't think 'cloak' is really the right word (I tend to imagine cloaks as being sleeveless), but jacket doesn't work for me either when I look at the ones worn by both the Forth Hokage and the Akatsuki. I guess they're more like trench coats, but that's a long phrase and I don't feel like typing it a lot so you get 'cloak' instead.

Characterizations are still off. It's technically for in story reasons, but it actually bothered me a bit because it feels forced. When I was writing the first version I found this funny, and I still do find it kind of funny because at least I recognize how forced it is, but that doesn't actually help raise the quality.

I think that's it for now. Next update will probably be end of this week or early next week.
Spielplatz out!

Next Chapter?

I'm debating when to post the next chapter of Ro7. I've gotten pretty much done, but I don't know if I want to post in a bunch of smaller parts like I have been, or if I should try and finish the whole thing first. If I take the first option, I could technically post a section now. If I take the second option, it might be another week or two.
I'm definitely leaning towards the first option - I'm a bit of an attention whore and I thrive on reviews.
Oh well, if I give an and take the first option, expect an update by Wednesday or Thursday. If not, it'll probably be a week or two.
It mainly depends on how distracted I get over the next few weeks since I'm determined to re-read the manga. Right after posting the last chapter I got lost on the tv tropes wiki and I treated myself to a few spoilers from the recent manga chapters. Since I haven't actually read the manga since last fall (oops) I decided to just start from the beginning (yes I am insane). Expect a few delays while I'm doing this.

Role of Seven - 2000 Years Pt. 4

Okay, new update.

I'll be honest, I wanted to write more of a fight scene, but I just didn't feel like it in the end. I've gone back over it a few times to try and put more in, like after Anko and Sakura left, but I finally just decided to leave it as it is.

Also, if you've read anything else I've written on this site, then you know I am not capable of treating Ibiki with respect. He ends up ridiculous in everything I write because he's just such an easy target.
Naruto's eyes actually shifted last chapter (Tsunade noticed it). Just like Kakashi told Ibiki, it doesn't mean anything for the seal, Naruto's just really pissed of at the attack on top of being on edge because of pretty much the entire day. You can draw any other conclusions you want for the time being.

There was a hint in this chapter about what might become a spoiler later in the story. If you don't know enough about Asuma's history canon-wise to know where that belt thing comes from, then it'll be a spoiler when it gets explained here, but that won't be for a while. (I've also seen his belt called a loincloth, it just doesn't look like one to me so I'll keep calling it a belt)

And yes, Kakashi is another character who is almost never in character when I write him. He seems to be becoming more hot-headed in this fic (as opposed to insane which is how I normally end up writing him). I'll work on him a bit more in the future but I really don't want to break the stride too much; so as long as he isn't horrible, I'll probably just keep going with whatever comes out of my head at the time (if you want an example of something coming out of nowhere - that fight with Ibiki was totally not planned but I ended up liking it).
Feel free to tell me if he's horrible.

Tsuande on the other hand shouldn't normally come across like this. Hopefully it'll be more understandable once I get the next chapter up.

I also decided to give the poor ANBU a name since I was picking on him so much. He also got a back story. Jiro was one of Itachi's teammates, but he's several years older than Itachi. He might never ever show up again (after a brief scene next chapter) but I felt he deserved this much.

The next chapter will be up some time next week and it will actually be the start of a new chapter!