Ro7 - When You're Sleeping

Okay I lied. There's still another segment after this one, but this one is longer than most of them have been so I decided it was a good sized update. I'm starting to think I shouldn't even worry about how many segments the chapters are broken up into. I know it makes it kind of drag on but oh well.
'When You're Sleeping' part 5 is up.
Okay, so maybe it was just because I managed to write like 15 pages and refer to Naruto a bunch of times without actually showing him and I found it funny. He will be in the next segment of this chapter, and in most of the ones after this, I promise.

So here's the notes:
The actions of the Akatsuki in this fic are based on very little from the manga/anime. Like what we knew before time skip. So Sasori here isn't really based on what we know of him from the Sand arc, it's just his character and abilities, not so much his motivations and stuff.

Also, sorry if some of the convo's seem like overkill. Not everyone is on the same page right now so there was repetition. I hope there was enough difference in each of them that you got something new from each one.

I don't know Inuzuka Hana's age from the manga. She's meant to be 20/21 here. And yes, if you remember what I said a few updates ago about Jiro being Itachi's teammate, you now know that Hana was as well. I like tying characters together, but if it seems like too much just let me know. Some people think it's too much to remember, so sorry if it does seem that way.

Lastly, I really need to work on balancing conversation with other stuff. Now it's just coming across as chunks of dialogue interrupte occasionally by an internal monologue and I don't like it. I also need to work on my dialogue itself. Most people all talk the same and it gets boring when the characters' voices don't come through.
Bleh,
I'm out til next time, I totally need a cigarette.

Oh, one last thing. Apparently my already not so great editing skills are slipping. Now I've thought this over a lot, and I don't want to go back to beta reader in the normal sense. At least not before I update. Because I update randomly I don't want to have to work around someone else's schedule (or try to find someone who can work around mine); I like being able to update when I finish a chapter.
However, I've been thinking that if anyone is interested in editing a chapter after I've posted it, I would be willing to send them the file so that they can look at the source (and write in about corrections) rather than just trying to make a note of mistakes in a review. If you ever notice something bad in a chapter and you decide you want to do this, just let me know (along with an email adress and whether or not you can accept attachments). I might not take you up on it right away if I'm being lazy, but I probably will. You can also request older chapters if you really want to. I will update edited chapters if I get them - maybe not right away (again kinda lazy) - maybe something like once a month make any corrections I've been told about or something like that.
Just let me know if you're interested.